BEDTIME

 

 

shadorma

Fog creeps in

snuggling tree branches

soft and moist.

Blanketing

sleepy soil, plants, and animals

silence reigns.

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If you are interested in shadorma find information from Pat who got it from Jane at   https://janedougherty.wordpress.com/2016/02/10/poetry-challenge-17-shadorma/

About oneta hayes

ABOUT ME Hello. To various folks I am Neat’nee, Mom, Grandma Neta, Gramma, Aunt Neta, Aunt Noni, Aunt Neno, and Aunt Neto (lots of varieties from little nieces and nephews). To some I’m more like “Didn’t you used to be my teacher?” or “Don’t I know you from someplace?” To you, perhaps, I am a Fellow Blogger. Not “fellow” like a male or a guy, but “fellow” like a companion or an adventurer. I would choose to be Grandma Blogger, and have you pull up a chair, my website before you, while I tell you of some days of yore. I have experienced life much differently than most of you. It was and is a good life. I hope to share nuggets of appreciation for those who have gone before me and those who come after me. By necessity you are among those who come after me and I will tell you of those who came before. Once upon a time in a little house on a prairie - oops, change that lest I commit plagiarism - and change that “house on the prairie” to “dugout on the prairie.” So my story begins...
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19 Responses to BEDTIME

  1. Thank you for having a go at a shadorma. I’ll put it in with this week’s poetry challenge entries 🙂

    • oneta hayes says:

      Thank you, Jane. I appreciate your entering it into the contest; even though I really didn’t know it was a contest. I’ll have to watch in your place to find out more about your challenges.

      • It’s not really a contest, no prizes. I call it a challenge because for most of us it is a challenge 🙂 Have a look at this week’s prompt. It’s a poetry form I’d not heard of before. It’s interesting once you get your teeth into it.

        • oneta hayes says:

          Yes, Jane, it is interesting. I liked the place and time sequence in yours. “Day” seemed such a logical ending. I must check out whether or not I am following you; if I don’t, I will forget. So back to your site I go. Thanks for the comment and opportunity to learn and practice with you.

  2. Colette B says:

    lovely atmospheric words to go with the image Oneta 🙂 the shadorma form is quite challenging I expect, not tried one myself yet but I first saw the form used here https://mindlovemiserysmenagerie.wordpress.com/prompt-schedule/ and if you enjoy prompts these have all kinds, a different form of writing and a prompt each day. I hope you’re having a lovely week 🙂

  3. shoreacres says:

    Your poem’s absolutely lovely. Every word seems to fit, and the sense of quiet increases through the poem.

    I am curious about the “shadorma” form, though. While it’s said to be Spanish in origin, it isn’t a Spanish word, and the translation services, when asked to detect the word’s language, all come up with Japanese. That would make some sense, since it’s very much in the mold of haiku and other Eastern forms. Whatever the source, I’m dubious about Spanish, but I do like it. it has some of the same nice qualities as the etherees I like to write.

    • oneta hayes says:

      Interesting research you have made. I haven’t heard of the word before. Actually I haven’t had any poetry instruction. I’m just hopping on what I find online. I find that it is interesting to me. The etheree looks very hard, but I might try it some time. Do you find that it is easier with a small focus as opposed to a broader idea. For example, maybe “tears” rather than “crying” or “blue jay” rather than “birds?” Or does it not matter? Do you have an article regarding poetry forms? And thank you for the kind comment about my poem.

  4. There is no more ‘magical’ happening in New Mexico than a foggy day. They are very rare and bring with them a very peaceful feeling. I love this beautiful poem.

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