“Debbie, the phone’s for you,” I called at 10:45 last Wednesday morning.  Those were my last words to her.  I could hear her excited voice, then she called back to me, “Mom, I’m going out.  I’ll be back by two o’clock.”  Those were her last words to me.

Whom did she meet?  Where?  Why?  Unanswered questions.  She had recently made new friends via the music scene.  She had hinted that she met a man who was interested in buying some of her songs.  Is that the reason she is gone?

Is she dead?  Is she alive?  Will I ever know?


image from Rochelle’s blog


About oneta hayes

ABOUT ME Hello. To various folks I am Neat’nee, Mom, Grandma Neta, Gramma, Aunt Neta, Aunt Noni, Aunt Neno, and Aunt Neto (lots of varieties from little nieces and nephews). To some I’m more like “Didn’t you used to be my teacher?” or “Don’t I know you from someplace?” To you, perhaps, I am a Fellow Blogger. Not “fellow” like a male or a guy, but “fellow” like a companion or an adventurer. I would choose to be Grandma Blogger, and have you pull up a chair, my website before you, while I tell you of some days of yore. I have experienced life much differently than most of you. It was and is a good life. I hope to share nuggets of appreciation for those who have gone before me and those who come after me. By necessity you are among those who come after me and I will tell you of those who came before. Once upon a time in a little house on a prairie - oops, change that lest I commit plagiarism - and change that “house on the prairie” to “dugout on the prairie.” So my story begins...
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39 Responses to LAST WORDS

  1. Iain Kelly says:

    A horrible situation to be in.

  2. StuHN says:

    Plan to continue this?

    • oneta hayes says:

      No plans. I don’t write complex kinds of stuff. Generally I do have happy endings. But this time the picture just seemed to call out to me, “Owner left,” so that’s what I went for.

  3. jillyfunnell says:

    Interesting take on the picture. I hope she comes home and her mother hears her sing her songs again.

  4. joyroses13 says:

    Oh the suspense! I hope she is alive. 🙂

  5. Yinglan says:

    Chilling tale, Oneta. And the suspense! Now I know how others feel when I leave them hanging.

  6. calmkate says:

    you have real talent, please keep these stories coming 🙂

  7. Dale says:

    It’s the not knowing that is the killer… IT better be because she can’t reach her and not because she won’t…

  8. Faye says:

    This shocked me at first. I did not realize it was fiction. I am used to your truth in reality postings. Was this a picture prompt for a writing exercise? Gripping beginning. Wow!

    • oneta hayes says:

      Just fiction as most of my writing is when I respond to prompts. Maybe I should put the prompt up front as some do. But it detracts from the storyline. I do try to have a lesson or “take-away” in most even if it is fiction.

  9. Dear Oneta,

    On tough place to be in. Nicely done.



  10. Alice Audrey says:

    This hist closer to home. Today some young women came by with a flier, looking for a friend of theirs who went missing in my neighborhood.

  11. She doesn’t know, we don’t know nor you I guess. It’s easy to think the worst.

    Click to read my FriFic tale

  12. The horror of never knowing what has happened to your child must be harrowing. I hope I never have to go through it.

  13. Liz Young says:

    That’s awful, not knowing.

  14. granonine says:

    Every parent’s worst nightmare. Well written.

  15. calensariel says:

    My gosh! You’re on a toot here lately! What’s up with the way different posts?

    • oneta hayes says:

      I’ve been working on hard stuff. Just needed a breather. I love the challenges. They keep me refreshed. They also demand lots more reading because I like to see the “take” from other people. My theme hasn’t changed; I still hope to be a “sweet aroma” to the Lord. But maybe he needs a breather sometimes too. 😀

  16. lisarey1990 says:

    Very sad. There’s a great mystery to this piece which is intriguing too.

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