She gave him a hug, bid him bye at the door. Then scurried to the window ’til he reached the bottom floor.

With a hesitant cautious omen, he looked up to see his woman.

He’d better not trust in her love too much; if so, his heart she would surely crush.

Words quickly spoken consider with doubt, if her actions are half in and half out.

When you are gone and she’s all alone,

She might return a flirty eye blink to the next guy who gives her a wink.


PHOTO PROMPT © Alicia Jamtaas

Friday Fictioneers, a 100 word challenge by Rochelle based on picture prompt. Thank you, Rochelle, for hosting this event. Visit Rochelle’s link to find other submissions to this challenging writing event.

About oneta hayes

ABOUT ME Hello. To various folks I am Neat’nee, Mom, Grandma Neta, Gramma, Aunt Neta, Aunt Noni, Aunt Neno, and Aunt Neto (lots of varieties from little nieces and nephews). To some I’m more like “Didn’t you used to be my teacher?” or “Don’t I know you from someplace?” To you, perhaps, I am a Fellow Blogger. Not “fellow” like a male or a guy, but “fellow” like a companion or an adventurer. I would choose to be Grandma Blogger, and have you pull up a chair, my website before you, while I tell you of some days of yore. I have experienced life much differently than most of you. It was and is a good life. I hope to share nuggets of appreciation for those who have gone before me and those who come after me. By necessity you are among those who come after me and I will tell you of those who came before. Once upon a time in a little house on a prairie - oops, change that lest I commit plagiarism - and change that “house on the prairie” to “dugout on the prairie.” So my story begins...
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14 Responses to COMMITMENT

  1. neilmacdon says:

    How readily we guard and restrain our love

  2. poetisatinta says:

    Great rhyming with this one 🙂

  3. Bill says:

    Polyamory may not be exclusive, but it’s real. A wonderfully composed poem. 🙂

    • oneta hayes says:

      I’m all for it! I believe good friendships might consider life long commitment. Just don’t pretend, nor trust, that all such relationships are going to end up like that. Set limits together.

  4. plaridel says:

    if he can’t let her go it’s better not to dwell too much on what’s happening behind the scenes.

  5. CGraith says:

    Those in between times of a relationship, not exactly sure where things stand. Cute story!

  6. if her actions are half in and half out What a glorious line! Love the poetry in this piece. Nicely done.

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